Friday, July 28, 2006

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He stood at the street corner on this bright sunny day, smells of fresh pizza wafting out of the Italian restaurant he stood in front of. He wondered how late his friend would be, but in the hearts of hearts he knew he would be pretty late if his past record was anything to go by. He had himself deliberately come there fifteen minutes but his friend had always managed to out do him again. He would have given him a piece of his mind had it not been such a nice day on this winter morning. He stood there soaking the sun watching people walk by, it had always been one of his favorite past times. He looked at the baby playfully enjoying the bumpy ride of his new sparkly pram, he looked at the girl joyfully clinging to this guy's arm as he was trying to block the visions of spending the whole day at the mall, he looked at the construction worker all jumpy after his dose of caffeine who couldn't wait to get to work and then his gaze stopped at this beautiful angel standing right across the street. She didn't seem in a rush to get anywhere as she stood there staring at him. He suddenly felt all warm and woozy as he tried to hurriedly get his unruly mop into some semblance as he uncomfortably shifted around. As he was looking around he noticed another girl sitting across the glass in the restaurant waving animatedly at him. His mind ran a quick flashback to try and place her but drew a blank. So he shifted his attention to the angel again but was kind of embarrassed to see that she was still staring back at him. He wished she could her shades off so he could read her face any better as he turned his gaze away. He suddenly noticed that the girl inside the restaurant had come out and was walking up to him. Confused he stood over there as she walked over and started speaking something animatedly. If he could somehow HEAR the words she could never SPEAK he might have heard her cursing him for not helping the girl across the road cross the road she could never SEE.

15 comments:

Madame Mahima said...

very nice post...who inspired this?
:P

totti said...

Nicely written dude. Long time since i have seen the old story telling with new twists. Its refreshing :)

Anonymous said...

That's a really neat story, didn't see the triple twist coming :)

M (tread softly upon) said...

God! That hit hard. Very nicely written Rohan.

Rohan Kumar said...

Ah thnk God everyone (with predictable exceptions) got the story or else I would have to do a Totti and post the first comment ;)

@mahi Thnx, who hmmmm, just an initial idea to write abt a guy meeting a blind girl which got expanded to this really

@totti Hope this will kick you to get off the phone and into writing something even if its not so refreshing

@ad Shock endings are always neat, my favs too

@m Thnk u and the intention totally :)

Anarkist said...

Nice post dude. Very Roald Dahl-esque, if there is any such thing.

Madame Mahima said...

umm predictabe exceptions?
*shifts around nervously*
no idea what you meant by that. not a clue.

i know ONE 'cho chweeet' girl who wouldn't have got this post, even if you patiently and lovingly explained it to her 3 times :P

Point 5 said...

Nice story dude...well written too...i could not have seen this ending...

Jinguchakka said...

Good piece!
Fiction is beyond me!

Anand said...

nice post!
Didnt know what was coming till I read the last line..well written!

janani said...

Hey great one! Loved the twist at the end

jhantu said...

Nice, fiction is the thing that I cant really type out while you surely can!

totti said...

Wth man! i didnt write because "i was busy" :p..hee hee..thanks for the encouragement and the gurantee that you won't rip on my BS :)

Shivangi Misra said...

Hey updated that blog of mine! Meanwhile, what song is this? Never heard... Tere bin by...? Will download... Loved it.

Rohan Kumar said...

@Anarkist Thnk u, I kinda thought he only wrote short stories for children?

@Mahima 'no idea what you meant by that. not a clue' As always of course ;)

@Pointy Thnx I know you are sucker for shock endings too :)

@Jinguchakka Thnx fiction is beyond no one according to me

@Anand Thnx

@janani Thnk you

@jhantu I have always thought fiction offers unlimited freedom for anyone's blog, mebbe you should give it a shot

@totti 'thanks for the encouragement and the gurantee that you won't rip on my BS :)'
But of course I wont, have I ever *evil laughter muhahahahahahahahahah*

@Shivangi Yup jus checked it out, new song from the movie Bas Ek Pal, I absolutely love it too